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Hi :). You asked me to look at your book (On my other account) And Now I have :). I will read it when I'm at home. It sounds very interesting so far :)

+Spell checked Chapters P-9.
+Plans for when finished it will be translated into Spanish.
+Requesting ideas for monsters in my book (Preferably monsters similar to the ones in the Harvest moon collection)
-I'm unsure how many chapters this book will be.

Unfortunately due to up coming exams this maybe the last day I can continue with this book until my exams finish in August. I would appreciate the support of comments and favourites of this book. It would really help getting me back into writing it again.

Thank you for the comment for now I won't be checking for mistakes until it is finished. So please keep checking regulary because I am still adding to it even now. And it's great to hear that my imagination isn't letting me down just yet XD

I would say, yes, it's definitely worth continuing. You introduce the main characters in a way that makes them interesting and place them in a fabulous, mysterious story line. I like that. Not too much description, just enough to set each scene.

I'm assuming this is a rough draft because of the large number of spelling and grammar mistakes. None of them are difficult to fix, and really, that's all that you need to do - correct those errors and use paragraphs and punctuation to clarify who is speaking when. Because honestly, the story itself is wonderful, and your basic style is clear and concise. Perhaps you could, if necessary, have someone else look at it who knows how to do editing - aside from the help, a fresh pair of eyes is always good because too often we're so wrapped up in the tale, we miss little things. I know I do, like all the time, lol!

That said, please continue your story. It has great promise, and anyone who reads this much is going to be as curious as I am as to how it turns out. You have a sparkling imagination, and most certainly will not be wasting your time if you finish it. "D