WOW!!!!!! Please write more about Shirley and Kevin! I'm so intrigued what happens next, this is a great novel....it has everything from vampyres ( this is the true way to spell "vampires"), love, romance and a horror thrill plot to it. I LOVE this series, and I'm definitely putting your novels in my favorites. My eyes actually teared up with the last sentence, please don't leave us hanging.
u should add me a friend and i think that there should be more to it but it was an amazing book ...
thank you :) and i know im replying to you back now but yes if your still interested in my books i wouldnt mind adding you :) thank you for the comment it really helps me to get back in writing :)
Hi Sharon,
You've got into action nice and quickly, which is great.
Straight off I noticed tense issues. I.e.: second line you write in present tense, 'I try to catch every word', then the following line is in past tense, 'Tension filled in my veins. The first line is also past tense. It is okay to change tense but only when intended, i.e.: flashback, flashforward, and when when planning things etc ...
It's great to space your... Show more
thank you very much! thank you for giving me advice and i'll reread my story again. i9 appreciate your help :)and of course! i'll read ypu book you ask me to read :) and thank you for being my friend too :)
hey there . thank you soo much for this review haha it means alot to me. i havent been writing as much as i use to and since this story is from a few years back. it's a little rusty so forgive me on that haha. but i really appreciate the feed back and this actually inspired me... Show more
hey there . thank you soo much for this review haha it means alot to me. i havent been writing as much as i use to and since this story is from a few years back. it's a little rusty so forgive me on that haha. but i really appreciate the feed back and this actually inspired me to continue writing and fix a bit my book. thank you sooo much haha.
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