I really like it but serciously change the age group. sixteen and up or have it on adult context.
The story is great but still a lot of errors. I'm not sure if it is worth cleaning up. It's not a unique story, is it? You have a fresh perspective that shines through. That's primarily why I read it all. If you can do a complete edit of spelling, grammar, etc and retain the POV you might find stuff to add to it and it could be worth it. Just my humble opinion. ;)
yeah I just realized how horrible the story was! LOL! I actually was thinking of editing it! TTYL xox)
Omg wow I really love most of your books how do you keep up with all of them? Every time I do a book I like, the next day a new one pops in my head xDD and then I'm like ah.. what about the last one..
Well you can expect my first book to be kind of sloppy can't you?I mean c'mon,but I understand we're u are coming from! My other books are way better.:)
It was okay, but there are some obvious mistakes like people stated, you should describe the characters, it makes people use there imaginations more
Keep it up and the font is too big, making me so confuse in all its really good.
! SORRY stupid careless mistake I mean blood on the DANCE floor!!
Me too!:)
Jay has so much fun he laughs like a girl :-D he is really cute :-) :-)