I think you have a story there, but you need to work on your grammar.
Also the cursing added nothing to the story at all.
I have nothing against rude language, If it is in character, and adds some dimension to the story line, but just using it when it adds nothing to the story is a waist of ink.
Try asking someone for help in editing your work. And keep trying.
It's good it just has some grammar errors. I liked it.