Ricky's sister

Janet Chapter 2 By:
User: karina.
Ricky's sister
Ricky' sister never knew she can a name of her own. Until she met Jacob, the love of her life.
Now RICKY is the obstacle that's keeping this two people from love.

Keywords: 
sister, love
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Deleted User

I like it, but why it is separated, it is hard to read it like that :(

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Viper365

I want to know what happens next.

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sallysue

you have a good idea but you need to reread your book the grammar is irregular and needs some changes

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staciemd87

They meet one day, the next they are kissing, the next they are in love. Reality doesnt quite work that way and when you write those things in a book they have to flow better. I like the story line, just needs to slow down some and take more time.

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lazarus67

It's moving along ok.But you shouldn't have Jacob get punched. Too rough. Maybe pushed or just thrown out. AND yes too soon to think about marriage...lol

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kaitylyna

Your book is ok but you are going too fast. You need to slow it down and let your characters get to know each other a little better before you get them straight into wanting to marry each other.

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