English is a tough language, even for those born to it. Knowing this, I read the story for its content and continuity, its plot, characters and heart. That's where all great stories begin, after all.
You've written a compelling story line with a beginning that captures the interest of your readers immediately, and impels them to continue into the subsequent chapters. The main character, Vinier, is instantly three-dimensional... Show more
Thank you once again Judy, you've been such a great help...
GBU...
The story is good. You might consider pairing up with a friend and going over your chapters one at a time and asking for help with the grammar. But otherwise, I like the story.
Thank you Serenity.. I will work hard to improve on my grammar. For the chapters, i was thinking on editing them, because I have problem uploading my update.
Yeah, I understand. It wouldn't let me upload individual chapters for my books. I had to upload it all at once, then cut and paste the chapters to separate them. I wish there was an easier way to upload updates but if there is, I haven't discovered it yet.
I've been searching here and there, but their suggestions just like yours. I think i'll just do what you recommended. Thanks again. You've been a big help to me. ❤️❤️
I think you have a good idea that will reach out to a younger audience and give them a chance to like your characters. My only issue was the spelling and grammar made it a little hard to follow. Editing is a pain I've had to edit mine 6 times now but it's an important part of the story. *thumbs up * I'd like to see this refined and more work into the characters.
Thanks ebell1. I will work harder to make it better. About my grammar or spelling i will try to improve. My English is not very good, so i need dictionary most of the time.
I understand i only know english but my spelling is terrible! Is there a software you could look up to make it easier for you? That will translate what you type? Maybe someone on here might know of one
Let's find out together
*thumbs up*
Thank for the compliments, I just happened to have a good imagination but as an author I'm still far from good. Will need your support to move forward. ❤️❤️❤️
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