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Space opera is right, I loved it. Even the cover lent itself to the deception that this might be a western. Nicely presented and well explained characters, to boot. Well done.

1 obvious oversight, you need to correct one of your Keywords. I'm referring to 'pace travel' which should be 'space travel', I think. :)

I really enjoyed reading this book. Thank you!

The story surprised me at first. You are so thorough in your research, I thought "They didn't talk that way in the old west." Then all of a sudden, it wasn't the old west.

Really tricky, ... and really good.

Thanks for the feedback Patrick. I have been planning a re-write on that piece as I see potential for some serious expansion. You are right about the final scene. It really could use more description to help the reader visualize the situation. I will work on that as well as play with the point of view.

I think there's potential here with some good scenic descriptions and interesting dialogue. Needs some cleaning up on a bit of word repetition, typos and grammar as mentioned in felixthecat's review.

I really like the mix of good old western with the new age science fiction twist, your characters are bold and interesting Im looking for more :)

This short piece threw me for a moment or two...as I read the encounter between the Marshal and Durogin. My mind kept trying to focus on "Western" (I didn't read the genre tag on the cover).
I like the development of the Marshall's character, the back story that defines who and why he is what he is. Your scene setting at the hotel was excellent, too. What I am not sure about is the effectiveness of the chase and the outcome, although this is probably due to the fact that I am unfamiliar with "Space Operas". That said, the setting of the final scene on asteroids somehow threw me, and I'm not altogether certain why, Clifton. Only, I guess, because I wanted to "see" more of the "terrain" out there, to ground me, as it were.
You have a few typos that you might want to look at in your document. Minor, really.
Lastly, I wondered as I read what the story might be like narrated in 3rd Past instead of 3rd Present. Something you might consider.
Thanks for joining and publishing this short.