BookRix

That was seriously good!

This is a nice piece. I enjoyed reading it in its own unique style.

The second paragraph, however was rough. It appeared that you accidentally switched tenses at times, so that tripped me up. Also, the last sentence is a bit cheesy and weird. I don't know, it might be just me..

But your writing reminded me of a poem. It was smooth and had a tone that reminded me somewhat of Shakespeare.

The story was saddening. I liked the way you personified fear. And though it's not quite perfect and has something to be desired in the middle, it is very poetic.

Well done :)

Great job!
Keep writing!

---RbG

a simple expression,that says somuch.

a simple expression,that says so much.

everthing i was feeling at this very moment, i read in your book. it brought me to tears

Just found BookRix. Love it.
The story is sad and touches the heart.
I thought of my father who dies in 1977 and the things I never told him. I loved him and never told him.
Thank you Anna Marie for writing this.
God bless you real good.

Good writing, very sad how fear can take hold on some. Serena

its like you were in my head

Powerful words with such deep meaning! I love its bittersweet passionate love that it describes!
Very sad yet good!

Very sad