In time I think you are going to make an excellent writer. The changes to Hollys Story were very effective. The thing I like the most about you is that you took the criticism and used it. Most writers, or any artist for that matter, take constructive criticism very hard and it makes them angry or resentful. I have been one of those people and I admit it freely. I let ego get in the way many times in my life especially when I... Show more
I really love this story. It is so emotional. I hope you add more to the story. :)
I see the emotion that is trying to come through the writers hand but there are some changes that you could consider.
I am the last person in the world who would suggest to a writer that they might benefit from a rewrite but I feel that in this case the story would be a little easier on the reader if were not in script form. It is written in the form of a movie or screen play for the most part.
I would think it would be easier... Show more
I see the emotion that is trying to come through the writers hand but there are some changes that you could consider.
I am the last person in the world who would suggest to a writer that they might benefit from a rewrite but I feel that in this case the story would be a little easier on the reader if were not in script form. It is written in the form of a movie or screen play for the most part.
I would think it would be easier... Show more
I see the emotion that is trying to come through the writers hand but there are some changes that you could consider.
I am the last person in the world who would suggest to a writer that they might benefit from a rewrite but I feel that in this case the story would be a little easier on the reader if were not in script form. It is written in the form of a movie or screen play for the most part.
I would think it would be easier... Show more
I see the emotion that is trying to come through the writers hand but there are some changes that you could consider.
I am the last person in the world who would suggest to a writer that they might benefit from a rewrite but I feel that in this case the story would be a little easier on the reader if were not in script form. It is written in the form of a movie or screen play for the most part.
I would think it would be easier... Show more
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