A quick note: "Try how each one feels like" - page 17. The correct form is either "Try what each one feels like" or "Try how each one feels." The "like" at the end of the sentence the way it stands is redundant.
Okay. That's all that needs to be tweaked. The rest is magnificent.
Too many people think that if you can just rhyme words at the end of each line, you've written poetry. You, however, have grasped its heart and are able to state things in a memorable, deeply meaningful, and beautiful way. And that is true poetry!
Thank you so much!
This means alot really :")!