Seems interesting enough.....Imma read it and post my thoughts when I finish it.
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Seems interesting enough.....Imma read it and post my thoughts when I finish it.
Never knew you were so freaking talentedly awesome....
Aww, thanks girliee. Have you been to chua lately?
no can't go for awhile cause testing and concerts and ma mom won't let me
Overall I liked it, though it does need to be polished. A few things i remember is on the first page you say my breaths came out fast and uneven. My suggestion is you change it to something like this: My breathing became fast and uneven. Also on the first page you say: I nearly tripped over a fallen branch. I think this adds more to how she it came to be that she trips: Fear had taken a firm grip on me, in my state of anxiety... Show more
