Thank you so much for your help and comment. I appreciate it. I will follow your advice it means a lot to me. ^_^
Thanks again.
Yours Truly,
Valerie Evening
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I read the short piece...and I smiled. You conveyed a feeling, a host of feelings, experienced by so many of us; beginning school, not feeling "a part of", and then as life happens, finding those few true friends.
Now, to improve the story consider this:)
Check your tenses in each paragraph. Do they agree? For instance, do you begin in past? Stay there if you do. All following sentences should be in past tense except for... Show more