Underground

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User: timjibiza
Underground
Corruption in the body politic, contains offensive language

Keywords: 
Haiti, disaster, politics
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shivshankarsingh

This is filled with realism.It gives a sense of the current situation. some parts are so wonderful.

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rebekahjennings

Nancy Kress (Characters, Emotions & Viewpoint) writes - For maximum effects, you should employ slang, profanity, and dialect sparingly - possibly more sparingly than your character would use them in real life. Avoid overwriting, cliches, and "as-you-know-Bob" (backstory in dialogue).

All undermine readers' responses.

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cavallo

Unfortunately it is too true.Well written.We must view others much the same !

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jadams

I stoped reading after the third page. The use of vulgar language is disturbing to me.

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petra michelle

definitely speaks to the dark side of human nature! As much as we'd like bury our heads in the sand and ignore it, this does exist!

Good luck, Timmi! Petra :))

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Carol Wills

I enjoyed this very much. So cynical but, so true...a brilliant portrayal of western greed in the face of disaster. Well done Timmi...Carol

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timjibiza

Thanks

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DreamSculptr

Shocking portrayal of reality in the world's cynical dark underbelly is well woven into your storyline...thanks for sharing your voice. Very interesting!

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rebekahjennings

I think when reading through your typed in text, you have to reformat. At the top of the text box are a few tools, bold, italise etc...

Bek

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timjibiza

Tour right, but could I get it to work?

I shall have another go

Timmi

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