Okay Storyteller, you can't just leave everyone hanging like this. "If I had a Heart", must be completed asap. I feel like I am watching a Television episode of Batman when I was a kid and then it ends with the familiar, "To Be Continued, Same Bat Time, Same Bat Station, Next week". If you are telling the story you have to finish it......Please........
Jennifer, I'm so happy you liked it. I'll let you know about the second part.
You wrote a very good story, although I must admit it did end rather abruptly. I would have liked to have seen more than the startling conclusion.
Aside from some grammatical errors (you should go through the story again to fix them), you did a fine job of building up suspense and painting a picture of a very cold, stormy night, fraught with tension. Well done.
thank you for your comment and the star. I'm so glad you liked it.
