I love how people on here and critique this story about it's writing but so far it seems 99.9% of the stories here are crappy at POV, plot, dialogue, description, past-tense/future-tense, and much more. I think this is slightly better than the things I've read on here, at least there's actual effort. Literally saw a story where the author used text-faces while writing and even broke the fourth wall to explain what was... Show more
Help i dont know what's going on with you pov is messed up
this book is extremely confusing. The grammar is awful , I have barely any idea what is happening. You book has the potential to do well however it needs some heavy editing. Also Adding a description would help as well.
"You book has potential" and you wanna jump on their grammar?