You have a nice start of a good story going here, but it needs allot of double checking on the gammar. The plot has potential though so keep it up. Thx for sharing.
It's cute so far...yes, Cute. Not trying to be a bitch but there is so much you could have done better js.
the story was wonderful i loved it it had some grammer problems but i didn't care about it i loooved the story it was so killer i could never put the book down !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
your grammar is very bad and i dont follow weel with it that way so please triple check before you upload anythinglese !!!