I have never written a short story. Your short story has inspired me to undertake such a project. I found a few minor errors in your text that are inconsequential to what you are doing. I have been engaged in writing novels, which are extremely time consuming and require great self-discipline. A short story such as the one you wrote grants instant gratification. Thank you! Read about fifteen pages of my book anywhere in the... Show more
This was a very nice story. You could have probably made a novel out of this one.
This really rings true Beck. You've exactly captured the thought patterns of a young, insecure girl with not much nurturing behind her. How easy it is to get caught up in something that appears glamorous and exciting when you're unsure about everything in your life. Good job.
Kerwack...quite a commentary highlighting the seedier side of life...perhaps this is what life is like nowadays in some settings, though drugs are disgusting and certainly hope our ten year olds reading three inch books don't derive a picture of the details of sordid life and gain wild ideas about bowing to peer pressure; rich family life tends to neutralize and counterbalance such tendencies unless they are brought to life... Show more
Wow, this story is really moving. I have a friend who is just like her. :/ I hope my friend has an ending just like in your story.
Marvelous writing by the way. :)
. . its a tough life out there on the street. Another Jennings masterpiece. Best of luck with the BOW