BookRix

I don't really like how it suddenly veers from Twilight, like "I love you so much that I will died for you even if I don't think there's an afterlife for me," to "Ah, what the heck. Let's betray Bella completely and prove that I was lying the whole time!"
Sorry. This one wasn't that great.

Very confusing with the messy grammar, but that's ok!
Words of note:
Vampires are like stone not just in body, but in mind. If they experience a truly strong emotion (like love) it is "engraved" in their soul forever. That's why vampires only have one mate. For example:
Victoria: when James died, her grief consumed her, and even though she flirted with Riley, she didn't truly love him because she had mated with James.
Think of it like imprinting for vampires.
Otherwise, good job!

ts good no great

You need to check over this and fix A LOT. It's a good plot but the grammar is absolutely terrible.

I liked the book but there are a few mistakes in it like leaving out some parts of the word,missing a few words,and putting chat lines where the`re not supossed to be

need more plz

hmmm i understand the plot but its just the details that are lacking if you could provide more detail i thing you would have a smash hit

what about edward trying to kill them?

really good but too short... sorry x

love the cover!!!!!