Storyline kept me reading = and that is enough for me to say I want to read more of your work. also a vote in the contest.
Great premise, beautifully written, a story that deserves to be given an expanded beginning. What it does have for right now, though, is my vote.
This was great! It was interesting. I think you can definitely expand on this. It would make an amazing novel. You have a way with words and descriptions. Thumbs up!
Blessings
Meli -< -@
Your economy of words paints an exquisite picture..p
Excellent and very impressive work, Patrick. You truly are a gifted writer. You remind me a little of Ray Bradbury...and that is a huge compliment. I shall definitely give this a vote in August and look forward to reading more of your work. Absolutely beautifully written.