BookRix

Oh, my goodness! That was hilarious! I absolutely love your take on this fairy tale! For one thing, it makes way more sense than the children's version, and for another, the ending had me bellowing with laughter. Hope you do more like this! Oh, and here's my vote!

Odd, when I came back on today, this site would not recognize me so I had to signup again. I used the same email address too. Oh well. sigh. :)

No apologies needed. It was a reaction you were trying to evoke by bringing in your reader, and this really did bring me in. As you can tell from my first posting, I was put off by this vain guy that I accused of "only wanting one thing." And I was right, that is what you were trying to show.

Just because I am an older woman and am sensitive of my aging appearances which has only been imposed on me by society, or years, whichever, that is not a reason to apologize. That was my reaction and I took the story personal, having a limited sense of humor.

As writers, we are going to find this often. People will either love your writing or not care for it at all. We cannot appeal to everyone. What we want to do is to draw in an audience and get their feedback. The structure and the vivid descriptions were great. :)

I didn't see an option for voting. ?

I love control and + as it enlarges the screen for me so I can read anything! It's an old trick experienced computer geeks use, but a good one. I noticed there was a download button for a reader from this site as well. I didn't bother as I like the control + option fine.

As for the book, I found the story to be somewhat funny and a little crude. However, I did like the idea and liked the various descriptions used such as the "windmill arms." That gave me a vivid visual.

However, being a mature woman, and also how much pressure it is for young and old women to "look attractive and sexy" through advertisements, porn, and the modeling industry, I am offended using an older woman to turn off the younger man. It just goes to prove that superficial attraction was all this was about.

If you study up on Georgia O'Keefe, an artist who made painting the desert famous, you will find that she had a very young lover in her late years. He loved her beauty that was inside her that she was able to project outside. That's my kind of guy! ;-)

Out of a rating 1 to 10, 1 being terrible and 10 being great, I give this story a 8 for it's main idea and good descriptive narratives. It would been higher if I was a sexual man. ;-)