it was really good :) but... again, add a little more depth. you skipped the entire scene with him asking her name. and then the part where he asked her where she lived and then asked her if she wanted to stay in the castle since she doesn't have anywhere to stay. then go on from there. it's a little chopy in some places but it's really good.
THE LITTLE MERMAID PART 2
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