Wow!!!!!This is totally amazing. You have awesome talent.....
Thanks! I try lol
I like what I read (which was the first, second, and third chapters)! It definitely needs some work regarding mechanics and sentence structure. I think that a little bit of primping will boost it; maybe a bit more detail and the like?
I can't wait to see what this looks like fully edited. I'm certain it will be lovely, and you're doing very well for someone who's my age! (well, if you really are 13, that makes you a year... Show more
yeah, of coarse. Thanks btw I know I need to work on stuff like that, I just typed it up without corrections lol but I will fix it up and I'm also working on a different book; different people but the girl has the same name 'riley' it's off to a good start.
I have no idea what those people were talking about. I really liked this book. But I didn't see you switch pov.... So... What's up with this?
I found about 2 switched pov so I have no idea why this criticism was given. This book is absolutely amazing. I love it
thanks, this is my first book, it's kind of sloppy, but i'm thirteen so im still learning
It means a lot to me XD
It was goo so you're welcome ^_^
I read the first chapter so far and it seems you switch point of views a lot. That may be something you might want to clean up. Besides a few grammar/spelling mistakes that can be easily fixed it seemed like an overall good start. (:
~Cheyenne
thanks
I am so sorry! I have no idea why I said point of view change! I meant tense change (between past and present). Again, so sorry!
I feel so dumb./:
It's ok, when I was reading it I was like, huh? but yeah, I understand. I think its pretty good, after all im only thirteen
I love your book. please write the next one