I enjoyed reading the first chapter. It is light and a refreshing read. Perhaps consider adding something with a touch of unpleasant about it to keep things balanced. You write in the present. That can present problems especially in talking about the past. Othewise I say well done. And if illustrated I wonder how the story might spring alive. Consider . but it is only a thought of mine.
Now that I'm finished, I'm mad that it's over. It takes a good book to get me riled up, so, it's a compliment for sure.
First off, your writing style in this book is nigh unto brilliance! Seriously, it is really good. It flows well with the eclectic feel, and the craziness that Mel gives it, which makes the story. I love Fantasy, and I love new things, and this is definitely one of them. I like how you took such an old,... Show more
Thanks....Melissa is also one of my favourite girls...she is fun, smart and mischievous.
Btw...she appears in "Whisper".
Here's the link.
http://www.bookrix.com/_ebook-lazarus-whisper/
"The stark, gloomy darkness is tugging at my being like a black hole, trying to suck my soul into its unseen vortex."
Man, I usually don't use language as 'primitive' as this, but...flipping awesome dude! I felt exactly like the phrase above, minus all the dark parts. I instantly knew I was going to like and I haven't even read past the first paragraph.
High praise all ready!
Thanks. But the story gets less glumy and becomes funny, fun, magical, and, somewhat romantic...sorry.
No, don't worry about the imminent gloom in the beginning, that's not what drew me in, it was your brilliant descriptions.
Gotcha.
a very lovable and funny character that makes you wonder at times... ;D
Great book. I loved it... now, where is the sequel? lol.
love and hugs.
i have read up to the first chapter so far and i am definitely going to enjoy this one
Thank you.