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I thought the poem was well written, and I appreciate the imagination that went into the torture of the man. I must say though, I didn't personally entire see why it was written as a poem, or at least in poem form. I think it could maybe use some editing to increase how well the words all flow together and maybe a couple of rhymes could be added in. Though this is entirely up to you, otherwise I saw no objective errors. I... Show more
Thank you hon. And I actually wrote this as a means for getting out my anger and frustration, that which was directed towards the boy in the poem/story. I'm not really one for writing stories or short stories. I prefer writing my pieces in poem form. A few of my pieces actually... Show more
Thank you hon. And I actually wrote this as a means for getting out my anger and frustration, that which was directed towards the boy in the poem/story. I'm not really one for writing stories or short stories. I prefer writing my pieces in poem form. A few of my pieces actually are much like this one, only shorter-- They're a short story in the form of a poem. Again, thank you so much for reading my piece and giving me your critiques.
No problem and I understand, we all have our preferences.
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