BookRix

i really enjoyed this story, would like to see it finished. i was totally drawn in and can't wait to read the rest when its finished

I truly enjoy reading the story. Please do continue. It's too good to end like this.

This was great. The diction, the introduction and the action really drew me in. some grammar checks here and there but overall very very good :)

Review - The story content is good. You drew me in with the first few paragraphs with her attitude and my curiosity over who she was. Liked the inner mono-log. You have developed the back story well.

I would suggest, honestly, that you get someone to work with you on editing. I just came out of a 4 month edit on my first book. Editor pointed out plot problems, chapter problems and lack of flow. After I practically re-wrote the book, we started on the line edit.

I can see you need a little help polishing up on grammar, punctuation and keeping the tension in the story. (Just like all of us.)

But the plot, the content is very good. I enjoyed it and would like to read more. I think if you have someone work with what you have right now, it will help you in finishing.

Just my opinion, but you are good, and this story could be awesome. Robynn

brilliant!!!! did Vickys da like love her ma or was he just usin her???? wen the nxt chapter??????? plz let me me b the the 1st 2no..or suffer the consaqeuenses.....>:D evil mwa ha h aha

SWEEET!!!! Can't wait for the next few chapters!!!

This reminds my of some of the good ol' Shannara stories Terry Brooks used to weave, The first Sword trilogy especially. Terrific start to what is shaping up to be greatly entertaining tale. Keep up the good work but remember, edit, edit, edit. The more you read your own work the more errors you'll catch. As far as errors go every one I seen was fairly minor and someone with your obvious grasp of grammar should have no trouble picking them out. Be sure to keep me updated on this one :) RMH

This is just fab!!! The plot,characters,settings and just everything where perfect. The story truly pulled me in and made me read more.

I love this book! It's awesome and I love Samuel, he's funny
If you write more, post it in the group or something. Please!

However, it is a wonderful display of imagery and a great plot. Please update... Your writing style is brilliant.

Sabrina Jade