Bullying is really rampant nowadays. It’s good to campaign to stop bullying and start standing up for others. It’s also about time to stand up for yourself if you’re the one being bullied.
This story is good. Although this is fiction, but it’s quite realistic. However in reality, the ending will have a negative impact if Jeffrey’s friend blames himself for what happened. This is just a thought to ponder on.
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Bullying is really rampant nowadays. It’s good to campaign to stop bullying and start standing up for others. It’s also about time to stand up for yourself if you’re the one being bullied.
This story is good. Although this is fiction, but it’s quite realistic. However in reality, the ending will have a negative impact if Jeffrey’s friend blames himself for what happened. This is just a thought to ponder on.
One suggestion for a minor typo error – use an apostrophe for “Where’s Jeff?” (page 5) and “But it’s too late.” (page 7)
You have the potential to become a good writer. Just continue to write and share your stories. Keep it up!
