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Update ^-^*

It's gr8! can you plz update

Develop plot a bit more fully. Develop. You can certainly write and have the imagination to do this.
I'm enjoying everything immensely so far:)

Well thought out and as mentioned above.....MORE PLEASE.
All the makings of a good read.

That was really, really, REALLY good. you need to add more.

Thanks a bunch

S

It's a great start. The character Lea seems to have some inner debates within her that make her not want to give into the Dragon side and that is really interesting. Eli does seem like a handsome character although for being a bad boy I would have thought him to be a bit more skeptical of Lea... maybe make them fight a bit more before they know that they love each other. I think the love came just too soon.

But other than that I love where you are taking this story. I look forward to your next update!

My mother said the same thing about the fall but I explained to her why (unfortunately I cannot explain that here)... and then she yelled at me T.T

So...I have encountered my very first dragon tale!
Your narrative is quite polished, and your plot line is very, very good. You've practiced and succeeded. A VERY intriguing tale from the imagination of someone gifted. I don't say that easily, either.

Consider this, however:)
The meeting of the two is excellent, but I think the "fall", the admissions of love come too quickly. I sensed this as I read. You have two very potentially terrific characters. Think about extending the meeting and aftermath so that love doesn't come quite so quickly:) ???
Is this a short story developing? A novel or novelette?
Really liked what you've done. You are a very good writer indeed!