Hi Benjamin,
I like your opening line.I like this story. There are a few spelling and sentence errors but the plot was good.
Good luck
Bek :)
You are my competition - but I HAD to give you a vote for this. Loved the story and especially the ending. You write very well indeed. Look forward to reading more in the future. Valerie
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