Review - It definitely fills the reader with questions, and makes you think. This is a strong story, that could use some fleshing out. More background. Little less in her head, and more of what is going on around her. I got a little lost during the party scene. But you did well in tying it together in the end. Need to intersperse her name more with 'she' in the beginning. Many sentences started the same way, 'she went to the... Show more
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